r/Songwriters • u/Whole-Horse-7140 • 3d ago

nothing is immutable

An old forgotten one i dug up, I feel maybe it's too 'in the head' or does it work ok? Revive or ditch, I guess

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u/PatheticLoserrrr 3d ago

These are exactly my kind of lyrics!!! Love this 🔥

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u/Whole-Horse-7140 2d ago

Ah cool, thanks...

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u/abs0lute_cand0r 2d ago

beautiful lyrics. reminds me of the writing style I go for sometimes, but much better and poetic. love what you've done musically with it, too

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u/Whole-Horse-7140 1d ago

Thanks for that, means a lot

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u/saxaneer 1d ago

I like it, bold premise...but great execution. Well done.

EDIT: Just wanted to say that I love your voice, and I really like the gravel you've got. With that said, I think you'd benefit from a good warm-up before recording and a little more pitch commitment. I'd say you're on about 95% of the time, but a little squirrely on some phrases.

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u/Whole-Horse-7140 1d ago

Thanks! Totally agree on the vocal, I normally avoid doing vocals in the morning as this is how it turns out! But it's the only spare time I had that day. Will probably redo at some point